Chapter 22 Thoughts
Jun. 4th, 2005 11:10 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
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For this fic:
The Good: OMG everyone's suddenly IN-CHARACTER, Cid is SWEARING, Yuffie is hyper, Tifa is angsting about HERSELF rather than CLOUD'S PAIN AND ANGUISH...and Cloud. Is not. Angsting. <--first half of chapter.
The Bad: ...Contrived Cloud/Seph interaction what? Zack's potential last words to Sephiroth are about CLOUD? And these two are supposed to be friends? Twenty dark dragons? WTF MATE, a level 99 Cloud has a hard time with twenty dark dragons and a level 99 Cloud can kick Seph's ass, thanks.
The Ugly: "He...touched me..." <--said by Cloud. Insert the wistful sixteen-year-old sigh, because I couldn't help hearing it. >_<
Why does this fic keep abusing me? It keeps looking like it's gonna get BETTER and then it turns around and bitch-slaps me with a Cloud-molesting Sephiroth! Gaaaaaaaaaaaah. Would it be that hard to actually have them interact? And develop their relationship through more than physical desire? I ASK YOU.
If the fic weren't years old and incredibly long, I'd so go begging for a rewrite.
ANYWAY, in other news, I'm working pretty much full-time right now at HITS, shoulders are a constant mass of pain due to prepping EVERY SINGLE DAY...and if anyone's wondering why I haven't been online? There is a simple answer here, friends. This is NOT HUMANLY POSSIBLE to play I don't think (you need RealPlayer to hear it), yet I insist on attempting and I have until July 22nd. I have forearm muscles. FROM PIANO. Visible muscles. (I also have the first half of the song memorized. Just the first half; I'll be buff by the time summer's out. *flexes*)
My SuNo (Summer Novel, credit to![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
alegwyni) has not been happening. Yet. May be put off 'til August, when my hands and arms recover and my brain's more than a jumbled mass of Sephiroth doujin scans. Thanks to all input, though, and when it DOES happen I will do that first idea.
I wanna watch Tactics, but Lauren has it, I do not, and she's at RenFaire today. Which stinks because I also miss her lots, and she'll be cutely dressed up in like six layers of clothing and I HAVE NO PICTURES because I HAD NO CAMERA last week. Raaaaaaaar.
Well. Time for Chapter 23, then piano practice. If Sephiroth makes a pass at Cloud I may just have to gouge out my eyes, so if I don't post? That's why.
(in the case that the author of ALHR should find this post, i apologize for being so vitriolic, but is there any chance in the WORLD you would accept a really really long detailed concrit on the fic as a whole and rewrite it because really you're an amazing author NOW [i have read your one-shots and DAMN] but ALHR's so out-of-character and the angst is tedious and repetitive and i can't stop reading it and must cloud act like he's twelve? and a stalker? somehow i don't think it's a great basis for pure undying love.)
The Good: OMG everyone's suddenly IN-CHARACTER, Cid is SWEARING, Yuffie is hyper, Tifa is angsting about HERSELF rather than CLOUD'S PAIN AND ANGUISH...and Cloud. Is not. Angsting. <--first half of chapter.
The Bad: ...Contrived Cloud/Seph interaction what? Zack's potential last words to Sephiroth are about CLOUD? And these two are supposed to be friends? Twenty dark dragons? WTF MATE, a level 99 Cloud has a hard time with twenty dark dragons and a level 99 Cloud can kick Seph's ass, thanks.
The Ugly: "He...touched me..." <--said by Cloud. Insert the wistful sixteen-year-old sigh, because I couldn't help hearing it. >_<
Why does this fic keep abusing me? It keeps looking like it's gonna get BETTER and then it turns around and bitch-slaps me with a Cloud-molesting Sephiroth! Gaaaaaaaaaaaah. Would it be that hard to actually have them interact? And develop their relationship through more than physical desire? I ASK YOU.
If the fic weren't years old and incredibly long, I'd so go begging for a rewrite.
ANYWAY, in other news, I'm working pretty much full-time right now at HITS, shoulders are a constant mass of pain due to prepping EVERY SINGLE DAY...and if anyone's wondering why I haven't been online? There is a simple answer here, friends. This is NOT HUMANLY POSSIBLE to play I don't think (you need RealPlayer to hear it), yet I insist on attempting and I have until July 22nd. I have forearm muscles. FROM PIANO. Visible muscles. (I also have the first half of the song memorized. Just the first half; I'll be buff by the time summer's out. *flexes*)
My SuNo (Summer Novel, credit to
alegwyni) has not been happening. Yet. May be put off 'til August, when my hands and arms recover and my brain's more than a jumbled mass of Sephiroth doujin scans. Thanks to all input, though, and when it DOES happen I will do that first idea.I wanna watch Tactics, but Lauren has it, I do not, and she's at RenFaire today. Which stinks because I also miss her lots, and she'll be cutely dressed up in like six layers of clothing and I HAVE NO PICTURES because I HAD NO CAMERA last week. Raaaaaaaar.
Well. Time for Chapter 23, then piano practice. If Sephiroth makes a pass at Cloud I may just have to gouge out my eyes, so if I don't post? That's why.
(in the case that the author of ALHR should find this post, i apologize for being so vitriolic, but is there any chance in the WORLD you would accept a really really long detailed concrit on the fic as a whole and rewrite it because really you're an amazing author NOW [i have read your one-shots and DAMN] but ALHR's so out-of-character and the angst is tedious and repetitive and i can't stop reading it and must cloud act like he's twelve? and a stalker? somehow i don't think it's a great basis for pure undying love.)
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